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if you were
exparadise

it's just every time
 1
i look at you,
 2
you look at me,
 3
i think about you,
 4
and my dreams fade to you
 5
that silver becomes gold
 6
blood flows like a river
 7
inside me
 8
and my heart swells
 9
 
 
i can't walk
 10
or speak
 11
and you walk away
 12
with a sigh
 13
and i fear you think
 14
i have nothing to say
 15
that i refuse to answer
 16
when you tell me you
 17
think of me every day
 18
 
 
i'm frozen
 19
and i melt
 20
all at once
 21

3 Jan 03

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Comments:

Very good indeed. Captured the feelings very well, I think.
 — Moose

I love this, sounds just like me.
 — misslo

the second stanza is weak, but you have some lovely moments here.
 — allie

Wow, you have insane Powers as a writer! I love the stuff you write. Believe me, if no one else, you can write! I am in the shoes of the person you are writing to, and I'm begging you, have the courage and strength to overcome your fear, for you will not be turned away. -Shattered(for now)
 — unknown

oh i like this
 — tragicbubble

o wow

i love this

but i should not

the voice coming from the far left of my right head is saying: no. you should not. because this suks

medusa medina
 — unknown

amazing

no critiques :)
 — nicolecote

nice.
 — listen

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