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Upon smiling at you I become acutely aware...
KatinaChoo

Upon smiling at you I become
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Acutely aware that I hate my smile
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Almost as much
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As I love your laugh
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And you take my hands
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And grin crookedly,
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The smile you smile only
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At me
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When I say your name it curls itself around my tongue
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Sweetly
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And it rolls down my back
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Like thick, poetic words
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11 Sep 04


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feels somewhat incomplete, like it should have more after the last line. thats the only thing I can offer at the moment, besides changing the title because its already the first line of the poem.
 — ShelbyS

Most poets use the first line of the poem for a title...leave it, it works. I like the second stanza...not sure of the first...seems somewhat disconnected.
 — unknown

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