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2 months 3 days

SaleenDriva

All happenin' so	1
quick.	2
2 months and 3 days into this	3
and I want to	4
marry	5
be with	6
only have	7
you.	8

Seems like so much	9
longer	10
than it's been.	11
Can't remember	12
not meeting you after class,	13
not planning my life around you,	14
not	15
longing, wanting, needing	16
to be with you all the time.	17

Time is no representation of our	18
love	19
for one another. None at all	20
Cause' even if I had 2 months	21
(and 3 days)	22
to tell you how much you mean to me,	23
I couldn't even come close.	24

You make me whole,	25
you fill me up, you are my	26
everything.	27
My girl.	28

15 Nov 05

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hea hea/

i'm envious
of your verdant lolly pop
dream.

been there
before/

day couldn't go fast enough until i could see here again/

skippin class together/

/
— fdostoev

2 months and 3 days?  Go ahead, and I predict 2 years and 3 months until the divorce.  This belongs in a private letter, slipped into her locker.
— unknown

hey line 4"andi " is not a real word. and stop mentioning her naame make it easier for us all to emotionally access this poem.
— lodza

fdostoev- Thanks...I try to stay outta trouble as much as I can, so skippin class may not be in the cards TO much ;)
Unknown-Nah, I'm too young to marry at this point.  It WAS in a private latter sliped into her locker, but I put my poetry up here to improve it, so please...if you have something to say in reference to form, style, flow-anything, please feel free to comment.
Lodza-Took the name out, better now?  AND I edited the word I had made up ;)  thanks-I goota write your e-mail still.  SCHOOL IS KILLING ME!!

Any other input is welcome, thanks a lot.
-BP
— SaleenDriva

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