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The Morning After Note / Seasonal Guilt
dmartin

It's another five-second summer
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But I don't mean literally.
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You've become a vanishing act
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filled with this deceit.
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Envious I am,
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Even though this season
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Has the bitter cold at it's feet.
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And you've come and gone so quickly,
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Warming the water just so brief.
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You brought my favorite time
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Just long enough to take it from me,
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Before it could keep me out all night.
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Don't worry longer than need be.
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I will not make you a blatant patron.
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You're a straight edge,
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An incendiary face on
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The side of my milk carton.
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But now it is too cold to look for you.
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And as another number rolls over on the mileage,
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I watched them smash the cement
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Where your hands had made an indent,
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But I didn't flinch.
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Our Hollywood Blvd. wasn't well traveled,
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It wasn't even bright,
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No one cared.
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So symbolic of our future.
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So surreal...
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Until I woke up, and left you uncovered and alone.
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02/26/04

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