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you in pieces
totheteeth

i watched the south seep out of your blood
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only to creep back in years later, thicker, stickier. no.
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i didn’t watch, i couldn’t; i saw you in pieces.
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in a fragmented gray scale, you quit the south,
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the way the water is quitting your body, slowly,
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maybe slower than you wish.
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i can’t ask you where you are but the question
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doesn’t trouble me. conversely, the answer
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won’t bring me peace: i know you are somewhere
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where the thick air clings to your skin and the dirt
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after that. it's just as well that's all i know.
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08/02/07

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