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hank and i press our hands
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hank and i press our hands
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into the wet sand
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and listen to the waves clap
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at the edge of the shore.
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over there, the sea is white
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and angry around the cliffs.
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momma says never go over there,
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so hank and i pull our fingers
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through the sand. we sketch
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each other’s bored faces.
 10
 
“i have an idea”
 11
 
--
 12
 
there’s this lady in our kitchen.
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she looks like momma.
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she washes the dishes every night,
 15
cleans the counters every morning.
 16
 
sometimes, the light gets caught
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in her hair. it’s like the time when momma's
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apron caught on fire.
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sometimes, her eyes might shine
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for a while like they see something.
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over the sink there’s a window
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staring at the beach not too far away.
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the lady likes it.
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sometimes, she’s there with her eyes
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burning, with her eyes like they’re waiting
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for something to run by.
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but they aren’t
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and nothing ever does.
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--
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our crooked lines run all
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over the shore. our eyes
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in the sand look as sad
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as the lady’s: the rains
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have come. now, the ocean
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curls over itself, white
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and ready. when it’s still,
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i can hear hank in my ear.
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he tries his best to spook me.
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though momma says not to, i peak
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over at the cliffs, at the tiny wreath
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with red ribbons ripping in the wind.
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there’s hank.
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there’s hank’s idea.
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07/31/07

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