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Disordered Memory
JoelJosol

You stare past me
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with a smile,
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looking for someone else
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but I will never tire giving my reply
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for as often as you ask
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'who are you'.
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Your mind broke up like pieces
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of a puzzle,
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each neuron link
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disconnected from another
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all former paths
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broken,
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their traces washed away.
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What was left couldn't hold
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memories of me
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not enough for imprinting
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until the day without good-bye
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you slipped away
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taking with you all these
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pieces.
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06/29/07

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