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be careful with hispanic women in bars
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i had tension
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on a handful
 2
of jet-black hair
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while drilling her twat from behind
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on a futon
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when some tattooed skeleton
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with a pistol
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stormed the room.
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he put it
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against my temple
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and swore at miriam
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in spanish.
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she swore back
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in spanish -
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grabbed an iron
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off the floor
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and put it
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to his skull.
 18
 
you killed him,
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i said.
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it's just eduardo,
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she said
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and bent down
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and put her ear
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next to his mouth.
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he's drunk,
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she said.
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he'll wake up
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and not remember this.
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i slung eduardo
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over my shoulder
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and put him
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in the passenger seat
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of his pickup.
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then i
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followed miriam
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in her car.
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we pulled
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behind a
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pawn shop.
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he works here,
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she said
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and we laid him out
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in the truck bed.
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are there
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other eduardos?
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i asked.
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not in iowa,
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she said
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and grabbed my cock
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and did something
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to my asshole
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with her tongue
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that made me
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understand eduardo
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implicitly.
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06/17/07

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