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Crying, Half Drunk, and Won't Call You
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I’m crying,
 1
half drunk,
 2
and won’t call you.
 3
 
And I’m writing this more for me
 4
than for you,
 5
because my hands need something to do
 6
rather than turn my phone,
 7
streaked with lime juice,
 8
over and over
 9
in my hands.
 10
Salt still residing
 11
unintentionally
 12
on the tip of my lip
 13
calls up memories of kisses
 14
I won’t feel for weeks.  
 15
 
For my whole life,
 16
I was out of love
 17
until I wasn’t.
 18
 
And I’m writing this more for me
 19
than for you,
 20
because my whole life I was out of love
 21
and now I’m drowning in it,
 22
six hours away
 23
from the man who pulled me under.
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Mexican tequila bottles
 25
accidentally
 26
leave rings on the furniture,
 27
like the one you promised
 28
to put on my finger.
 29
 
I’m eighteen years old
 30
clouded by what poets define love as,
 31
and I believe in promises.
 32
 
And I’m writing this more for me
 33
than for you,
 34
because I want to believe
 35
but my pride has no faith.
 36
 
So I’m crying,
 37
half drunk,
 38
and won’t call you.
 39

05/14/07

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