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twenty-eight and five days sober
unknown

by the age of sixteen
 1
it was no longer
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just
 3
my dad's fault.
 4
 
he
 5
had really
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tapered
 7
his drinking
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and
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started making
 10
efforts.
 11
 
did i
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need help
 13
changing the oil?
 14
 
would i
 15
like to go with him
 16
to the pool hall?
 17
 
my pride
 18
wouldn't let me
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accept.
 20
 
doing so
 21
would be admitting
 22
that i needed him,
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which
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of course
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i did.
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but
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i knifed him
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with all my
 29
hurt turned hate
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at every offering.
 31
 
i was cold
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and hard
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as the inside
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of the casket
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i wished for him.
 36
 
maybe
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its the
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birth
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of my son,
 40
 
my own
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aging,
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or the weight
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of my
 44
failed attempts
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at sobriety.
 46
 
i don't
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know,
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but lately
 49
i've been thinking
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about that casket
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and
 52
 
how the regret
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will taste.
 54

01/01/07

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